1.语法有些许错误,比如,
tell是及物动词,不可加介词,to应去掉
2.有些搭配有问题
3.长句并不一定是最好的,化为简单句并加上写标点 .
4.时态
下面这个只是参考：
As I told you,we planned toexpand our marketing network.
THerefore,I am engaged in marketing tours recently and I am, for the moment, on the way to anappointment with dealers.