Dear ***:
Good day. I am (name), the manager of (company).Ifeel so happy and gratifiedthat there is an excellent staff of my company who have a chance for furtherstudy abroad. For me, hedeserves to get better education and a better future as so progressive a man. Therefore, it's my great honor to stronglyrecommend this excellent young man to you.
(name),the staff ,started workingin my company since september,2012. He is a man of working hard, taking responsibility,full of Enthusiasm and being motivated. He did lot of reading on business whenfree, asked questions from Colleagues. Much soon, he got proficient atall kinds of business and made some achievements.
Now, as a young company employee, (name) works more hard,being more serious, responsible and thought highly of. Weall hope he could get a better future. Heis still young, fullof vigorousness, eager to learn more, so he chose to study abroad. Althoughwe feel loss for such an outstandingstaff’s departure, considering his future, I am still nothesitating to support his studies in your school. Sincerelyhope that he will also get your support for him earning a chance for his dream. Thank you.

(your name),
the general manager是全人工翻译的吗？sure.有些文字空格丢失啦，你要是一点英语都不会得要人帮你抄啦。至少转到word帮你检查拼写。