错误在括号处注明!错误不止十处,因为楼主有不少漏打和错打.
(With) the popularity of online shops,a new profession has (去掉been) appeared on the internet,which is called internet models,internet models are employed by the (salespersons) of online shops,in this way,customers who (want) to buy things online can know more about (what) they intend to buy,they can choose from the most suitable clothes ,and internet (modle s) are popular (with/among) young people,some (students) earn money (漏打字了吧?) modle in their spare time ,they can gain work experience that may be useful (to) them after graduation,(Besides),they want to wear beautiful clothes to show their (beauty) to others .