打字手误：places of interest ,Shanghai Oriental Pearl TV Tower,an amazing place
我觉得有更好的写法：It's in the southeast in China.---It lies in the southeastern China.
they awlays smile at you --常常微笑用be always doing的句型更能表现
I'm sure that you will love there.--避免和后面的love重复,用fall in love with it
另外,妙灵法仙写得也不错,只是有几个语法错误.我也稍作修改,嘿嘿.
Hello!Welcome to Shanghai.This is really a beautiful city,which lies in the southeastern China.The weather here is fine,and you can visit many places of interest.
As we all know,Shanghai Orental Pearl TV Tower is an amazing place.The tower is not only tall,but also nice.
The Bund is one of the symbols of Shanghai.And the best time to visit there is at night.I'm sure that you will fall in love with it.
People in Shanghai are friendly and helpful,they are awlays smiling at you .
In a word,Shanghai is a magic city,and I love Shanghai.