2.xxx respects teachers in school; she always greets teachers with bows.She brings positive influences to people around her with her bright never-fading smiles.She actively participates in group activities,cherishes class honor,and is always ready to assist the other students with their problems.She accepts praises from the teachers and students with modesty.xxx is a student with outstanding traits such as optimism,generosity,steadiness,and so on.
原文其实没有什么明显的语法错误,但语言显得生硬,结构也有些零乱.
做了较大修改,看看这样语言是否简洁些,行文是否紧凑流畅些?
另外,除了形容幼童,innocent不宜作为褒义词使用.因为已有多个形容词了,我便将其直接删除了.
还有,文中的xxx请改为该学生的姓名.如果是用于极正式的场合,除第一次提到时用全句外,后面可只用姓.如果不是非常正式的,可以只用名.不用每次都写全名.英语中几乎见不到用“this student”的.