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It’s my honor to be able to submit an application to your school.I apply for two reasons; first,as we all know,your school is a well internationalized famous university with good teachers and equipments and in a strategic location.The graduates are widely accepted and the employment prospects are good.Secondly,my parents and I are convinced that your school is a good choice and it is beneficial for my future development.
I think that the future society will be in need of actuaries and financial professionals,as I am also interested in this field,so I chose the BSC (AC) and the BAA / BAA (Acc & Fin) as my aspiration.
If I have the honor to be accepted,of course,the most important task for me is to study hard,and I will actively participate in various activities as well.
Upon the completion of undergraduate studies,I will continue to further study in order to respond to social needs better.