Hello ! My favourite story is ,because it is very interesting. It can tell us many fables. We can learn a lotin the book.
I hope you will like it.
第一：连词不可以乱用.
第二： a lot 是后面不跟名词的, 我们可以从书中学到“很多”.如果要a lot of 就要加一个名词复数在后面, 例如“things”,它修饰可数和不可数名词.
第三：写作文最后用Do you like it? 有点唐突, 如果说的委婉一点我个人感觉比较好.
总得来说你的作文不错,不过要加油喔, 句式要灵活运用呢, 可以用并列句呀, 不要老用简单句, 学会了复合句以后,写起作文来会更顺手哟.