这篇应该可以,如果觉得长可以适当删除一些.
My ido
My idol is Marie Curie.She was one of the greatest scientists in the world.She also was an outstanding and talented scientist.She had long curly golden hair.She was tall and she was of medium build.She is really outgoing but she was clam.
Marie Curie was born on November 7th 1867.She spent her childhood in Poland.When she was a small girl,she became in interested in physics.She finished high school at the age of sixteen.But at that time women in Poland couldn’t go to the university.So her life was very poor when she began to study in Paris.In 1895,she married Pierre Curie.They discovered Polonium and Radium.And she received Nobel Prize in 1903 and in 1911.She died in Paris when she was 66.能不能简单一些，我才六年级修改了一下：My idoMy idol is Marie Curie. She was one of the greatest scientists in the world. She also was an outstanding and talented scientist. She is really outgoing but she was clam. When she was a small girl, she became in interested in physics. She finished high school at the age of sixteen. But at that time women in Poland couldn’t go to the university. So her life was very poor when she began to study in Paris . with her diligence she received Nobel Prize in 1903 and in 1911.这个人是谁啊居里夫人……能不能换成男的，还就是一分半钟，尽量短一些,我才六上这篇应该可以了。是男的周杰伦。My idolMy idol isjay zhou . he is young , not handsome but so outstanding. he creats so much music ,and sing by himself!so this the reason that many people like himespecially chirdren.his music is extraordinary and full of special charm. in a word,I admire him !he is my proud forever!