【As is clearly shown by the cartoon】（加上这个可能好点）,it goes without saying that the cartoon aims at revealing a common （and seriou）（去掉括号里面） pheonmenon in our society : with the rapid development of internet,
（We choose it as the only tool to communicate with others）
唯一的交流工具,不符合现实,应该改为 the essentialtool 或者the popular tool
可以改为：The inrernet has become essencial to our life,We choose it as the populartool to communicate with others
and don't want to do the samething (in the reality) .
(in the reality) 应该为 in real life
Therefore ,We live much closer than anytime before
yet the distance
（inside of ）改为( between)us (become)further( long )改为 （longer）than anytime before too.