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Dear madam or sir:
Thank you for your sparing time to read my letter.
I am Chinese college student ,21years old.I want to join the lee kong chian School of Business .I have interested in business.And parents are business too.parents in their words and deeds that I have set a very positive view of the honesty ,and know the major of the team .In order to temper themselves ,I use the holiday time to go to the supermarket for work..70 percent of people have gave up the hard work but I insisted on it .I m good at thinking the things flexible .I joined the technological invention game and won the third place .At the same time I apply for a monopolization.
I have been considering to study in your school for quiet some time.I have some question the following:
First I d also like to know I have no language achievement whether can be advanced school for learning and take the exam then .
Second What are the professional of business
And last what I should to prepare?
To honour of the school now,but I think the school will proud of me soon .I would appreciate it if you can consider my application and I look forward to hear from you soon.Thank you so much