这个结尾不错,但也有小问题.
Life is really hard,so sometimes we will【删除will】 ask ourselves what we are living for.The 14 days has witnessed Jang Tea-san’s grow【改为growth】 and leaves us a question about the reasons of living【the reasons of living改为reasons for living】.
After fighting against greed,hypocrisy and injustice,Jang Tae-san plans a new life with the people he likes.He says:“There are some people I love in the world.It is the reason why【删除why】 I live.” Tae-san has found his life goal,and it’s our turn to answer this question now.