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When l meet a difficult.My friends can help me In my opinion our parents are knowledgeble They will give me some advice if l have a trouble.They protect me in the safe .lf you do not pass the exam your parents will help inspire you to stand up to fail .My father seems veryfierce but My father isn’t good at expressing his emotions so in fact my father loves me very much.l feel happy now .because love around me.Every parent likemy parents so we all live in love
修改好了When l meet a difficulty,my parents try to help me,they are knowledgeable always provide some suggestion for me,when I am in trouble,they protect me in the safe.Normally,lf you fail the exam,your parents probably will inspire you to stand up to failure.My father seems like very fierce because he isn’t good at expressing emotions.But actually he loves me very much.I always feel that love around me.
人气:162 ℃ 时间:2020-06-19 08:51:33
解答
第一句话就错了,when是一个时间状语从句,你的主句在哪里?所以不能打句号用逗号,然后把M改成小写.再就是在me后面打句点,I大写.一般in my opinion放前面.
trouble是不可数名词,不能加a,if前面不要打逗号
《亲,你处理下标点问题~标点是很重要的!这关系到语法啊啊啊啊啊~
in the safe小心用,感觉有点问题
还有条件状语从句你的意思有点不当,最好前面加一个but if you do not……
若插:i还有为毛父母会鼓励你父亲会很暴怒吖TAT
语法也有问题,父亲看起来很凶猛?中文翻译的通,但英语没有这种说法
还有,建议形容父母不要用这种纠结的方式,express emotion这个词组固定搭配用的少,还有事实上我父亲很爱我只是他不会表达有点不好,书面表达会扣分
还有,没有前因后果为什么他现在很开心了?应该是当我知道我父亲愤怒只是因为他不会收敛情绪其实他很爱我这个“前因”0所以才有了“后果”
作文注意逻辑关系~
love around 没有动词TAT
最后一句改为:most parents are the same as my parents
作文中那句有很大问题QAQ
语法语法语法…………
别瞎用高级词汇……呃..好吧我承认我只是初中..要求别那么大
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