The day when my life changed TO the better was the day when I MET Killian, my dog, AFTER entering a pet SHOP. I was soon attracted TO this little dog, KNOWN as the king of dogs. I would USUALLY lie down on the floor AND he would lie down BESIDE me. If I left the room, HE would cry until I returned. It didn't matter WHETHER someone else was in a room with him or not. Little did I know that I was making SUCH a huge investment in my life
这只是在基于原文的基础之上进行的修改,如果需要改进篇章,你这段就全废了.这是小学生作文吗?就是改语法之类的 高中作业 没做过这种题不会啊啊估计是中国老师出的蹩脚中式思维的英语篇章。以上即是我的修改结果，修改的单词都用了大写标注了出来，请查收