1.那天天气很好
It was sunny that day.可以.或者The weather's fine that day.
2.公司离我的宿舍太远,我不得不花很多时间在路上.
The company is so far away from my dorm that I had(说的是一般情况,用现在时就行,改为have) to spend much time on the way.
3.下周日有一个关于"爱护流浪动物"的公益活动.
There will be a public activity about "saving homeless animals" on(on去掉) next sunday.
4.All of the hotels had no room.(这里的room要不要加s?)
我觉得这句子这样改比较好,All of the hotels had no available rooms
5.如果他做到了,他就是一个好老板.
He will be a good boss if he makes it.
6.你的经验比较缺乏,你怎么看?
How do you see /think of your inexperience?
是的,我与贵公司是有差距,但是我相信,在不长的时间里,我会达到贵公司的要求.
well,there is a gap between your company and I,but I believe I will be qualified for the job very soon