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The line graph illustrates the death rate and the birth rate in a developing country between 1900 to 1970.
It is clearly that at the first decade(1900~1910) both death rate and birth rate kept 40%,after which the data shows a fluctuation.The death rate rose rapidly and finally peaked up at 60% in 1920.Then,it dropped down as a same speed when it rose and stopped till 1940.from the period 1940 to 1970,death rate maintained a slight fluctuation.
Coming to the birth rate,a slight decrease from 4o% in 1900 to 35% in 1930.From then on ,the birth rate surpassed to the death rate and reached the highest point(roughly 50%) in 1940,while death rate were showed the lowest.After a sharp raise the tendency became decline and moderation.And the rates in birth and death stood at 30% and 20% in 1970,respectively.
Overall,along with the country developed in 70 years,its death rate and birth rate changed a lot and turned to be better in the future.What’s more,the birth rate finally higher than the death rate.