这里没办法用不同颜色标注,我直接改在文章里了,
It goes without saying that the cartoon aims at revealing a common phenomenon （揭示一种现象）and severing（和revealing 一样,用-ing形式） problems in our society that:
More attention should be paid to enhance our conciousness（增强意识） of supporting old people （总觉得原文拗口,还是这样简单直接）
while the number of which people who leave their old parents alone and don't fufill their obligations of supporting the elders is growing （主句the number is growing,剩下的是从句）
What's more,They even think that their behavior is granted.(他们认为自己的行为是被认可的)
large amounts of old men are just like the football that is kicked from this side to another side in this picture （老人像球一样被踢来踢去,而不是生活被踢来踢去）
I fully convince that this implied meaning could strike a chord with people in all walks of life and enhance our awareness to improve old parents' living standard.（我认为,所以convince要用主动形态,一般现在时；生活标准 living standard）