1 finest student 太过中式,后面的as衔接生硬
2.as a double degree
3 adaptive person适应能力强一般不这么说
4 时态问题.要么全都过去时,要么现在时.我下面修改的全部按照现在时来修改.
5.在活动中表现积极,She shows her active side in activities 这个说法很不地道.
6 还有些问题不一一列出,我都在下面的文章中帮你改了、
It is my great pleasure to recommend Miss Lilnghong Zhao to you.She ranks among the best students in my class with a double degree.
She is a very intelligent,honest,creative person with strong adaptability.Her achievement speaks for itself:she has been the top of the class.Besides,she is an editor of radio station and a arguer of the faculty.She actively participate in activities and joins these activities positively.She really has good interpersonal skills and the spirit of teamwork.Her ability to work with others is a special quality that will benefit her as she moves on to the next level.By the way,this student is good at liberal arts,but not really good at science.She works very hard and always try to be the winner and never give up.These spirits leave me a deep impression.
Miss Linghong Zhao is undoubtedly a student with the potential for great success at the next level.In my opinion,she is sure to give all of you a big surprise in the following days.so I enthusiastically recommend her for admission to your university.