这里必须改成these,因为前面罗列了多种情况,属于复数概念,this是单数.
 
此外,本文有些小错误,稍作改动：
College students have a 【lot of】 ways to pay their college fees.Many students have their parents to pay the fees.Some students may apply 【for】【bank loans】 and others will try to find part-time jobs 【on and off campus】.Apart from 【these】,many good 【students】 can ...
a little 只能用于不可数名词,way是可数名词,复数应改为a lot of 或者many;
申请的词组应与介词for搭配；
用复数loans较好,因为贷款会多次申请,且通常为多笔分别发放；
介词错误,校内应为on campus,校外应为off campus；
不再赘述；
many应与复数搭配.