Good days,first of all we are pleased to invite you as our new factory business partner (Senior Consultant).We are deeply grateful for our new factory able to do early process successfully.
Below are the details of your remuneration and benefits package.
1.Initial phase before production,your round-trip expenses (including transportation,accommodation etc) will be fully reimbursed.
2.After production,our company will pay you the consultation fee as a recognition to your support (The exact amount will be confirmed with you during your next trip to China).
Job scope description (initial phase)
In the initial phase,you are expected to improve design strategy for new equipments.(I will email you the factory preliminary layout design and equipment & tooling blueprint for your reference).
If you have any further questions,please feel free to contact me via telephone or email.
Thank you very much.
Best regards,
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改了不少,你看看.我不知道prophase是你们一定要用的专有名词还是什么的.我都帮你换成initial phase,或是可以换成 initial stage...因为prophase 据我所知是生物专有的细胞分裂状态的名词.
还有,你的工作范围写得太不详细了.而且太简单了.