帮我看看这个英文句子有没有语法错误?A live performance given by liudehua was held o_英语解答

帮我看看这个英文句子有没有语法错误?
A live performance given by liudehua was held on the evening of July 8 from 7:30 to 10:30 on People Theater , XXX band accompanied.
刘德华个人专场演唱会,7月8日晚上7：30-10：30在人民剧院举行,伴奏乐队是XXX Band,
有错误的话提出修正意见

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解答

改为
A live performance given by liudehua was held on the evening of July 8th from 7:30 to 10:30 at People Theater ,XXX band accompanied.
这样就行了.有两个比较低级的错误其他还好