whatever you are doing, focus on being 100% present是句病句,你翻译下就不通,别用chinglish,百分比拼错(打错)
a classmate of mine used to get good grades in our class,but he liked reading novels.这句逻辑有问题,前后没有转折还用but?
Everyday 后跟 finished?时态错误
he spends/spent
on reading不是on read
……
看了遍全文,错误太多.你的语法不好啊,要改的地方太多了.另外这篇作文题目是什么?不知道主题的话,没法看你有没有偏题,或者立意错误.
要改的话找我私聊吧.
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