2." in children",是不是改为among更好点?
3.“throught ”,应是"thought";
4."be unwilling to ",这里be用的不对,前边缺东西.
5.”confront with“,这里用错了,confront是个及物动词,应当直接跟宾语.
6.”since people will do their utmost “,这里since用的似乎不对吧?
7."draw on others' strengths,thereby bettering themselves.改为:draw on others' strengths to better themselves.是否更好?个人感觉你用的似乎不恰当.
8.”pretentious,so “这句话前后不搭,有木有?”stengthen bonds“,不是加强团结的意思吧?
9.” save the time “,去掉the.
10."Both competition and cooperation are integral parts of human lives,they become increasingly interralated and interdependent",这句缺少了连词.
11.”interralated “,应是,interrelated
12."throught in cooperation",很不通顺,是否有错?
(看雅思的作文,真的很费时间,好多单词我都不太认识.你词汇好丰富,很佩服!但是个人感觉,你通篇作文中还是简单句太多了,还有意思重复的内容貌似多了点,你可以用复杂句型来表达丰富含义嘛,要不会显得很累赘,对吗?不过你的词汇量真的很大,很厉害.如果我上面的改正有什么不足,请指正!)谢谢你,我打完了没回去纠正单词,除了拼错的词1,3,11,12有拼写错误,大概能有什么分数呢?
我还没考雅思,所以我做不出确切的评价,实在抱歉。