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In modern society many poor students with bad behaviors emerged in many countries schools which has become a focus in the society.At the same time ,it occurs to me that what is the reason that cause this?
As far as I am concerned,factors lead to this phenomenon are as follows,first and foremost,the pressure from the schools and parents even the society.When the pressure for the students reaches such proportion that they could not bear it any longer,they may do some things which are abnormal in the eyes of the common people.For instance,Ma jiajue from Tsinghua University killed several students is because he was discriminated by his classmates that brought him great pressure unconsciously.Moreover,the living surrounding also affect the behaviors of the students.If the surrounding of them is optimistic and bright,they can also solve the obstacles that they meet in a clear mind.Conversely,they may take measures which are violently.
What is needed in solving this problems can not solely rely on one aspect.Schools should give health education courses to students as well as prepare psychological treatment for those students who may have problems.Along with the hard work from the school,students themselves can take part in some activities which are good for their emotions and their grow up.Only in this way can we tackle this problem effectively.